Descpion:
In writing we have been writing about camp I was writing to entertain so I made it funny.
First we had to make our 1 draft then we looked back over it to make it better
FARTS THEY ARE DEADLY
The sniper his name is Eli.
Silent still and deadly one shot kills he fires everything around his dead straight away.
Now the story
We were trying to sleep there was 7 of us in our cabin.But then bang one man down bang bang bang bang it was only me and Eli then I released Eli was the sniper I ran but bang I was DOWN.....
The archer still and silent but so deadly his name was Max Max Hannan ...........
We were doing an activity then i see this little movement out the corner of my eye.
But I spin around because my mate had just been shot in the chest with an arrow I turn back around then I see him noooo I scream an arrow was gliding at me I was hit it went straight through me.
FARTS THEY ARE DEADLY
Feedback & feedfordwards: you did really good at using great words but
you could of done better by describing the people in the story. #Fletcher
Evolution:I think i did well but it could be longer and I agree with fletcher.